I like this idea of working with time dilation, particularly because I tend toward slower-moving, introspective writing. Adding some sort of clock in the narrative is something I may experiment with.
Here is an exquisite short example of a combined quick-slow style from my favorite substack fiction writer, Jim Cummings. He presents beautifully detailed, evocative description and then spare, truncated dialog. He never points out the Era in which the story takes place, but the style and idiom is pure Mid-century. I enjoyed your post this morning, J. ( is that Jim, Jack, Jeremy, John, Jonah?)
I like this idea of working with time dilation, particularly because I tend toward slower-moving, introspective writing. Adding some sort of clock in the narrative is something I may experiment with.
Here is an exquisite short example of a combined quick-slow style from my favorite substack fiction writer, Jim Cummings. He presents beautifully detailed, evocative description and then spare, truncated dialog. He never points out the Era in which the story takes place, but the style and idiom is pure Mid-century. I enjoyed your post this morning, J. ( is that Jim, Jack, Jeremy, John, Jonah?)
https://jimcummings5251.substack.com/p/a-letter-from-proxmire?