Hoo mama! Good thing for me that I read this while eating breakfast. I echo Sharron's praise of your use of figures of speech. Spectacular! One after another.
Very powerful and descriptive. What I found interesting was the symbiotic nature of the interaction. She gained the satisfaction of power (fish on a line) and the audience gained the illusion of Veronica. I liked the way it ended back in the reality of the grocery store, selling the sizzle.
Hoo mama! Good thing for me that I read this while eating breakfast. I echo Sharron's praise of your use of figures of speech. Spectacular! One after another.
Vivid sketch, I'd love to see it connected to something larger.
So. Damn. Good.
Fantastic writing!
Extremely vivid for such a short story! Very well done, sir!
Thanks James!
Lord have mercy! Is it getting steamy in here or is it just me? I feel like I need a shower. And a cigarette. And I don't even smoke.
Some pretty darned fabulous similes and metaphors in this piece, J. I'd like to steal every one of them. But I won't.
Just a blast to throw all the words at it. And, well, It seemed to get steamier with each pass 😊 🤷🏻♂️😉
Uh...yeah.
Very powerful and descriptive. What I found interesting was the symbiotic nature of the interaction. She gained the satisfaction of power (fish on a line) and the audience gained the illusion of Veronica. I liked the way it ended back in the reality of the grocery store, selling the sizzle.