I love how imaginative George is, and the way his imagination brings his father’s story to life. Also this line was great: “Like something is being passed to him, not just the story, but a weight, a wonder.” Makes me think of how some stories can be like that!
If the rest of the story is as intricate as the foundation you are laying, we are in for a hell of a ride. Now we have the mysterious Isla, what's next? Looking forward to future installments.
Brilliant! I love how you wove the “present” and the “past” into one scene, so that George was there in the cave. What is your secret for getting the right mix for the reader to know and feel and see both just like George??? Seriously, brilliant.
That’s a very kind thing to say. Thank you. And I’m glad the trick of it worked. Though, perhaps it’s not a trick at all–my brain works like George’s so I sorta follow his lead and think “what would I see during that part of the story?” Also, a lot of editing, reading it out loud, etc.
I love how imaginative George is, and the way his imagination brings his father’s story to life. Also this line was great: “Like something is being passed to him, not just the story, but a weight, a wonder.” Makes me think of how some stories can be like that!
Absolutely. I definitely was thinking about how some stories stick with you (text or aural). To me, that’s just pure magic.
This final draft came together nicely, brother. I am so ready to return to the island. Let's go!
❤️ A few tweaks, thanks to your notes
If the rest of the story is as intricate as the foundation you are laying, we are in for a hell of a ride. Now we have the mysterious Isla, what's next? Looking forward to future installments.
That's my hope, too. We shall see.
This is leaving me breathless.
Ask your doctor if a brisk walk and a sip of cool water are right for you.
Hah! Maybe you are right. I was thinking more like a gin and tonic...
I like your idea better. Screw water and brisk walk.
Brilliant! I love how you wove the “present” and the “past” into one scene, so that George was there in the cave. What is your secret for getting the right mix for the reader to know and feel and see both just like George??? Seriously, brilliant.
That’s a very kind thing to say. Thank you. And I’m glad the trick of it worked. Though, perhaps it’s not a trick at all–my brain works like George’s so I sorta follow his lead and think “what would I see during that part of the story?” Also, a lot of editing, reading it out loud, etc.